And, here goes the Captain Angela

Anyone who has yet to vote on the boat subject should do so at his or her leisure. I am interested to see how the poll turns out and if it turns out well, I will try to post weekly polls. On to more interesting business:


ANGELA!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!


She wrote a poem. This is the poem. It's the ish.

The windows cry for me
Crying for me the windows do
Cold on the outside i appear to be
On the outside i appear to be cold
Heated and tumultuous on the inside i remain to be
I remain to be heated and tumultuous within
Rough on the outside like sand paper i am
I am rough like sand paper
As tensions collide the sand melts
Melting sand and colliding tension
Hard rough eyes fogged over
Fogged over eyes turn glassy-glazed
Hot and cold fight to be seen
The windows cry for me

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What I liked:
Love the way you play with words, yo. You're blastin' that playing with language stuff to the mizax and I think it's hella' tight. That aside, I could rave about playing with language all day and be just as constructive as the next person, so I'll leave it at that for now. Oh, but I will actually add that this poem rawks the boat that sails on the waters of my soul.

Improvements:
lack of capitalized "i" prevalent throughout, which for an English major like me, is like stabbing me in the heart, which tends to cause heart problems later on. I guess that's the only thing that really bugs me. I would love to see you playing with imagery that is sort of theme-based. I use the sea a lot, and the more you write on a certain idea with a restriction to a certain subject but allow yourself to freely play with language, the more awesome imagery and word twists you'll have. So, I would like to see some of that here. That would be my constructive feedback.